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Bitter Aftertaste

by Maria de Chirikof | June 9, 2009 at 2:54 AM

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Bitter Aftertaste

Dreaming takes me there
where the Goddess dances free
leaving the nightmares

To dance on and on
becoming one with my soul
beauty resides here

slowly it happens
I begin to miss the beat
tripping and falling

down to rest my head
once more on my pillow soft
awakening me

My souls on fire
passions dared to dream at night
fade in the cruel dawn

nothing left to me
but the bitter aftertaste
and no mouthwash here

where the people are
wake my goddess wake us now
forget these nightmares

when I wake you sleep
too much pasta late at night
my days burn my heart

until I dream you
and can leave this world and no
bitter aftertaste

Comments

I couldn't just ignore this poem, it is such an amazing dream,

with Love

Dando

Thanks, I never think my poetry is much good but liked it enough to post it. thanks for your encouraging comment!

love,

Maria

Hi! Looks like you tried something different and stated your thoughts and emotions in way of a poem...and I say it turned out well. I like how your growing in style and expanding your range. Your poem is lovely, full of the meaning you capture...
The images of the day and night colliding with the world of dreaming and waking here....
Nice job. Give it another try sometime, and don't give up!

It is about colliding worlds so thanks for understanding that part of it. Where trying to capture all of our essence is hard since they are too different seeming and feeling the differences between your dreams and reality can leave a bitter taste in your mouth.

thanks for your support, as always,

Maria

Maria, you really must join the Poetry and other Writings group. There is such energy to your work. I love the sudden shifts in mood and the juxtapositions. I look forward to reading more. Please start collecting these into an anthology so that more people can read them one day. Big hug...

http://www.worldpulse.com/pulsewire/groups/1317

Oh, I think it is kind of bad since I know what I wanted to make it but lack the talent to pull it off. It was going to be a poem with each verse it's own little haiku but is a bit lacking. My Ode to a Japanese Goddess who fills my dreams with joy and dance and beauty. Trying to honor her gifts and express how prejudice feels a bit too...

I think if I can work on it later and make it more what I wanted it to be I would post it at the poems group but think it needs a lot of work so more a rough draft. It is a good start to trying to express those ideas I think, at least! When I started writing it I had one idea in mind and this one grew so I tried and hope it is interesting to read to others!

Most I don't think I would show since the ones that are good are also kind of way too personal. But thank you for your support and encouragement! Maybe I will write another one if the mood hits me.

hugs,

Maria